Last term Y4 were reading ‘The Iron Man’ by Ted Hughes and using it to inspire their writing. We were really impressed with their work. Here are some examples of the great descriptive sentences they wrote:-
Amy – Slowly he turned his huge, horned head…
Caitlin – His head, as colossal as a bedroom but as square as a cube, …
Adam – He looked as red as fire and his eyes shone like the moon.
Jimmy – His eyes shone like illuminous fire flames in the dark.
Cole – Falling from head to heel, his enormous head fell off.
Ella – He lay in the darkness as the sea swept upon the shore.
Having read those descriptions I am sure you have a clear picture in your mind of the scene they are describing. Let us know what you think by posting a comment.
Here is Leon’s paragraph describing his own version of the Iron Man, motor mouth, as he approaches the edge of the cliff.
The motor mouth came to the edge of the cliff. How far had he walked? Nobody knows. How was he made? Nobody knows. Taller than the tallest tree, the motor mouth stood at the top of the cliff on the brink, in the darkness. The wind against his face. His great iron head shaped like a car wheel but as big as a swimming pool, slowly turned left, slowly turned right. His massive ears turned this way and that way. He was hearing the sea. His eyes, like doughnuts, were searching the sea.
What a great description. I love the phrase ‘his eyes, like doughnuts’ – I can really imagine how wide his eyes were at this point, desperately searching the scene.
WELL DONE Y4.
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